May 26, 2010

The Water Leaks by Nathan Willbanks

Lately I've been testing out some new book ideas on Nathan, and he seems to have caught the writing bug as well.

Here is Nathan's latest book, titled, "The Water Leaks".

Once upon a time there was a man who lived in a gold house and his name is Richard Conjen.
Richard has a dog and lives in a small town where the water comes from.
The problem with the water is that it leaks all over town. All of the people smell so bad because of the gross water. Richard fixes the water leak with a hammer. The smell then goes away.
The End

So if I were reviewing this story, a couple of questions come to mind.
1. Richard Conjen - isn't he the guy who won the first season of Survivor 10 years ago????
2. Richard lives in a gold house...interesting...I wonder how much that would go for? And can you melt it down if you're desperate for cash?
3. Where do I get a magic hammer like Rich has? It fixes leaks with one quick smack? Look out Handy Manny this could be bad for you.
4. Is it possible that Rich lives in a waste management plant? I sure as hell wouldn't be drinking from the tap.

Overall the author painted a vivid scene that captured our senses and left us on the edge of our seats wondering if the town's personal hygiene problem would soon be resolved. Thankfully, it ended with a fairytale conclusion. Rich, the hero, came in with his mighty hammer and saved the day. It's an easy read, half a page, (2 notecards to be exact) and the illustrastions are Caldecott worthy!

I think it's definitely ready for submission.


Anne said...

I, for one, would purchase this story! xoxo

Deb said...

Can't believe I missed this. Very funny post Lori and a great story by Nate. Hope he's got the bug permanent!